He said, She said
***Warning: Pardon the mush. I couldn’t resist.***
He: She’s beautiful in any angle.
He pressed and released the shutter, hoping to catch the muted light of the afternoon in her hair.
She turned away just as a soft breeze blew over the field. She called out: “Hon?!”
He gasped.
He almost forgot about “Hon.” The fiancé. The lucky bastard called “Honey.” The viable choice. He whose name appears beside her name in the wedding invitation he almost shredded.
He: Of course. An engagement photo shoot won’t be complete without the groom-to-be of my bride-supposed-to-be.
He bit his tongue. The words remained unspoken. He’s used to this – not speaking up.
He: What good would it do? She already made her choice. And has that…that creature to prove it.
“Thanks for doing this pre-nup shoot. You’re the best photographer I know,” she cheerfully said, obviously flattering her best friend.
She: Probably the densest, but the best guy I know. I can’t possibly wait forever until you come to your senses, can I?
He: She’s looking at me funny. I should say something nice like ‘Thanks for the wedding invite… I’m happy for you.’ NOT. Pick me! Pick me!
“Can’t go wrong with an engagement shoot in the field, right? Even with overcast skies, eveything’s perfect,” he managed to say as he forced a smile. He fumbled with his camera, avoiding her gaze.
“It’s perfect,” she agreed.
She: You’re perfect.
“Hon” arrived, out of breath after running from the other side of the field. He sidled up to her, finally entering the frame, and placed his hand at the small of her back.
The camera’s viewfinder fogged up. The image of the smiling couple blurred.
All he could see clearly was her face.
(Written for Short Story Slam Week 8 and Three Word Wednesday Gasp Mute Viable)
I can relate..
a mute question
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Intriguing! I wonder what happened next 🙂
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wow. i just visited your blog and read it. that mute question is very hard to answer. oh by the way, my story’s not biographical. 🙂 i was just toying with the prompt.
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Ina, the girl could have called off the wedding. Or the guy could have suffered in silence. For all eternity. Hahah. 🙂 I had fun writing this. It was a blast.
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Oh give me mush anyday, I just LOVED this … and very cleverly written too! :o)
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Ships, passing in the . . .wheat field? Close enough to speak, but not to communicate. Wonderful write.
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@Deborah – I knew it! The girls will love the mush! Hahah. 🙂 Thanks for the kind comment.
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creative, the way you describe her and her, and the inaction are superb!
🙂
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I like it. Very real and visual, and the feelings passing between the two are palpable. Very nice writing! (… you don’t know what you got til it’s gone) 🙂
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Cello, true. The inaction is killing them both 😦
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Charles, there you go. That’s the apt word for the scene. PALPABLE.
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Thanks for the comments y’all! 🙂 It’s my 2nd for short story slam and my 1st ever for three word wednesday. I’m loving it.
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The traps people fall into for lack of expressing themselves. Well written.
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so sad unrequited love because the person feels they left it too late,
Wonderful written
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Jennifaye, mush is good for the soul, no pardon needed. Thank you for your visit to Raining Iguanas. Come back and look around anytime.
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This was intriguing. The dialog in his head is the real truth.
I like it.
Maybe, he could shout out at the wedding when the preacher asks,
“Is there anyone …. blah, blah, blah, etc,” Nah … too expected. ~~~ : – )
Thanks for stopping by my blog.
Isadora
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Isadora, nah…that would be too melodramatic. Hahah. Hey, thanks for stopping by. 🙂
John, thank you. Yay for mush.
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I love that he sees her face when, of course, we don’t. (In photo.)
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this is great.
what a divine tribe.
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You write mush very well. 🙂
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John, I’ll take that as a compliment. Thanks! 😉 I write other stuff but mush is sooo much fun.
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manicddaily, EXACTLY. 😉
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It’ll go on forever this kind of complicated love. Your version was a joy to read!
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Complicated but could have been so much easier if they had the courage to give it a go. 😉 “Hey! Lena” , thanks for visiting.
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aw, don’t you hate it when two people, who should obviously be together, are too blind to see it themselves…. well done 🙂
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Thanks e.a.s.! Glad you liked it. 🙂
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brilliant insights, time and space make the hearts grow fonder.
well done.
🙂
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Thanks, Morning! 🙂
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See, it is always best to ask. Then you know and will be rewarded or get on with life… or both. Nice story, and I too relate if I think back fifty years! 🙂
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