Unspoken
Some things were better left unsaid.
So she wrote yet another poem.
It started with “my greatest joy is my greatest pain.”
He wouldn’t see it anyway.
She poured her heart into every word.
Every verse stung.
“Take me to Malta to see jellyfish fireworks,”
She planned to say,
That will be the day…
(Written for Short Story Slam Week 20, Poetry Pantry #87, and Thursday Poets Rally Week 62)
The ‘jellyfish fireworks’ really made this poem for me. Great work!
Thanks for visiting my blog and posting a comment, Nissa. ***smiles thinking about “jellyfish fireworks”***
A nice snapshot.
thanks booguloo!
i can so relate to her pouring her heart into her words!
and i agree “jellyfish fireworks” is brilliant!
♥
Thanks Dani for commenting and for subscribing.
Glad you liked it.
So vivid and I could see her at her desk writing this, but knowing she would never really share it. “Take me to Malta to see jellyfish fireworks,” Made me want to cry.
Wonderful job with the 55 words. I never realized how hard it was to write a story in 55 words, instead of the long, short stories I write. You are really good! Be blessed.
http://elizena-lovingmycreator.blogspot.com/2012/02/soul-song.html
Thank you very much Elizena for your gracious comments. It’s always nice to write and be read and appreciated by fellow writers. I’m so thankful for supportive writing communities.
Oh yes, it was definitely a challenge writing down the 55 words.
lovely.the first line is truth.
So true. That’s why we have angsty poets and writers. Hahah!
I can relate to the beginning of this…so many times I have wanted to say something in a poem, but I knew it best I didn’t so on to another one…love “jellyfish fireworks”
a comforting thought, writing poems until one musters the courage to say the words aloud…
a cool read…:)
Thanks Brindle!
Hello.
It’s always easier to pens words than to speak them.
Very nice.
Thanks for sharing.
No Anguish Or Pain
Sorry..I meant “pen”
Different strokes for different folks. Some people find it easier to write, some find it easier to just speak.
Wonderfully crafted poem, you did a great job here. Very well done. Loved reading it.
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.
i just visited your blog. i didn’t know there are many styles of haikus. intetesting stuff.
That will be the day..
leaves you with an aftertaste of sadness.
Well expressed.
http://wordsinverse.wordpress.com/2012/02/29/the-spring-that-walked-away/
Yes. Ain’t that sad